Sunday, October 24, 2010
I enjoyed judging the poems in the Short Attention Span Poetry Contest on The Freeway at Facebook. They had a range of subject matter broader than most newspapers. Which made it difficult to judge what two-liner was best. I relied on my poetic aesthetics to make the determinations. What resulted is a top ten. Here they are:
# 1 - Mira Hall
Sticky summer dreams of snow--
of ice and frosty window-glow
This poem is the winner in my book, because it is the strongest one when it comes to stirring pure sensations. And it intellectually rewards rereading by offering both euphonic alliteration and Frostian rhyme.
# 2 - Rick D'Amico
Smile, though summer's sunset sands are chill,
crisp September evening tastes of Autumn's thrill.
This poem has nearly the same qualities as the winner, with less musical economy (wordier). A close second.
# 3 - Jim Babwe
I don't feel much safer leaving the ground
after I'm searched by thousands standing around.
This poem offers intriguing social commentary through dark sensory humor.
# 4 - Kristen Proffitt
Bed in a stuff-sack, home on my back
How I wish that my life were as simple as that.
This poem has both sensable metaphorical imagery and moving philosophical charm.
# 5 - Ragini Gill
When you look my way I must come near;
For your eyes tell a story I can't wait to hear.
This poem romantically employs synesthesia (mixing of the senses). It also just feels classic.
# 6 - Cassy Muronaka
Arnold took office and the state budget took a bath
Do you think that Gray Davis is having a good laugh?
This poem delivers sharp political commentary using personification and echo sense.
# 7 - Michael Holland
Drama, discovery, outrage and mystery
are what you find when you research your local history
This poem surprises the reader with layered newsiness and a clever rhyme working like frosting on the top.
# 8 - Anne Louise Bannon
Inventor Milo Farnsworth made TV possible--
if only he'd make Hellcats plausible.
This poem should win the humor award. Flat out intelligent and funny.
# 9 - Carrie Mitchell
It is an emergency, my hand is charred
By the time I write out the fifteenth card.
The slightest flaw in this strong poem is that the circumstance needs to be explained. It could have been delineated in the poem by stating fifteenth emergency card (but then you'd have two emergencies).
# 10 - Mike Burnside
Looking for evidence that the economy is growing,
As I watch my unemployment benefits slowing.
Economical (in every meaning of the word). Seemingly inherent alliteration and rhyme.
OK, hope you enjoyed my commentary. I'm currently running a Halloween Poetry Contest. You can check it out by going to http://1031poetry.blogspot.com